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First Page: sally-ce.deviantart.com/art/TW…

Previous chapter: Chapter 4 - Reunion

Next chapter: Chapter 6 - Accursed






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Story, comic, characters and artwork © Sally-Ce 
Translation support by MacNugg :heart:

Personal note:
Pokémon Sun and Moon will be out soon!! :la: (In 1 and a half week yeah but still!!!) I've been looking forward to it for such a long time and now finally!! <3333 Which starter will you pick? 'v' (I'll pick Litten!)

Andddd.... When even Lankie denies her, Zarhe finally submits.
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:star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star-half::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

I decided to write some critique which I hope helps you in future. My english skills are limited so I have refrained myself from writing this to you for some time now. So if I sound harsh, I do not mean to be mean, I have limited set of word I know and that's why I may sound like caveman. xD

Anyway, I see you have developed with your technique like coloring, shading and such very much. Your bubbles are awesome and you have placed them well on the pages so they do not disturb the storytelling. ^^

What bugs me is the anatomy I hope you would practise more. I chose this page to write my critique, since here we can see all the things I am writing about. Ofc they appear on other pages every now and then too. The things that I would wish you to look into more are round bearlike heads with ears really far apart of each other, eyes that are smallish at some frames and larger at other frames and their distance from each oter differs form frame to frame. Small frontal mouths are also seen very often, when wolves have wide mouth and small mouth is anatomically impossible to do for them. Often appearing small mouths give impression of Winnie the Pooh, but it probably is just me... They also go from super small mouth to wide open mouths in seconds which gives them imression that they are screaming, unstabile and emotionally uncontrolled all the time.
Your wolves torsos are often drawn as really wide and really round. They appear like barrels, which is trait that appears on show type labrador retrievers, but not wolves, which are flat and thin when you look at them from above.
But in addition, you draw very nice looking noses, paws and claws. You use poses very well to demonstrate characters behavior and reactions in ongoing situations and conversations.
If you want, I can help you with red lines. I am not anatomic master myself, but I do believe I could help with something anyway.

I like your backgrounds and color scenes you use in them. Also you lighting has improved hugely from the first pages of this comic. It is awesome to see someone developing during the comic you clearly put lots of effort into. ^^