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First Page: sally-ce.deviantart.com/art/TW…

Previous chapter: Chapter 4 - Reunion

Next chapter: Chapter 6 - Accursed






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Story, comic, characters and artwork © Sally-Ce 
Translation help by kaschill7

Personal note:
So, now the website for the comic is up!! :party: Half a year's work is finally done and I'm so happy!! :'>
I'm going to try to enable comments on the website, but it's way harder that it seems. :'c I'll try my best tho!!

Plus my Patreon is now active!! :D <3333
On that note, I'd really like to thank David Antoni, for being my very first "patron"! :aww: :heart: Thank you truly much, it means a lot to me! :thanks:
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:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

Hey Sally! Been a while since I pestered you with critique >: D (I don't like this rating requirement on critiques though? Gosh.) Beautiful work as always! Super excited to see all of these characters interact finally (Tacoro is so funny, oh my gosh)

I had a few thoughts on paneling:

Here's a thing to consider, and it isn't a MUST but it can help at times: When you're trying to imply quick movement of a character its typically best to have them moving from left to right. This is because we read from left to right so our eyes will follow the movement a lot more naturally.

The second thing: I really love the scene that's playing out here but because the majority of your panels are zoomed in so tightly its difficult to A. Read the movement clearly and B. Keep track of where the characters are in relation to eachother. For instance, those last few panels where Lankie is on top of Tacoro, if you zoomed out a bit more it would be a lot easier to tell what's going on. Right now its pretty crowded and looks a little bit claustrophobic.

Anyhow, I love the scene! I enjoy how you switch between comedy and serious moments, keeps us entertained and on our toes! Hope the critique helps, looking forward to seeing more!